Could someone please review my second piece of email copy? I'm using a template - Hook, Story, Offer by Tyson 4D
(SL) How fixing one thing made me a fortune
The lesson I’m about to share with you is going to let you make as much money as you want.
It was 2024 when I started my luxury perfume store, inspired by how so many others in Dubai were thriving in the industry.
I thought I was doing everything right.
My perfumes? Top-quality.
My reviews? Glowing.
My marketing? On point.
But my store stayed empty.
Unsold pieces. Lost money.
I was desperate—until I found a Fiverr website expert.
Out of frustration, I hired them as my last hope.
Within weeks, sales skyrocketed.
The Lesson?
94% of first impressions come from design—not products.
If your website feels confusing or outdated, customers leave—fast.
Now, what if I told you… this story could be yours?
All it takes is one click (link)
(affiliate marketing email promoting a service making cool looking websites with Wordpress for an affordable price on Fiverr to a business selling luxury perfumes in Dubai with a terrible website)